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Avoiding Wordiness: Writing Skills Success Practice Exercises

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Updated on Aug 25, 2011

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Practice Exercises

Practice Exercise: Wordiness

Try rewriting the following sentences to remove the fluffy wording. Suggested revisions are at the end of this exercise, but your versions may be different; there's more than one way to rewrite these sentences

  1. It gives us great pleasure to take this opportunity to announce the opening of the newly built playground at the Municipal Park in Succasunna.
  2. Some educators hold with the opinion that corporal punishment should in fact be reinstated in our schools to act as a deterrent to those students who are considering engaging in inappropriate behavior.
  3. It is certainly a true statement that bears repeating over and over again that technological advancements such as computers can assist employees in performing in a very efficient manner, and that these self-same computers may in fact result in considerable savings over a period of time.
  4. I arrived at a decision to allow the supervisor of my department to achieve a higher golf score in order to enhance my opportunities for advancement in the event that such opportunities became available.

Practice Exercise: Precise Language

Choose the option that expresses the idea most clearly and concisely. Answers are at the end of the lesson.

    1. Doubtless, the best choice we could make would reflect our association's founding principles.
    2. It is without a doubt that the most advantageous selection we could choose would be one that best reflects our association's principles that it has had since its origin.
    1. The least expensive option in a situation such as this is inevitably also the most advantageous option.
    2. The cheapest way is the best way.
    1. Too many youngsters prefer using their spare time with popular modern pastimes to improving their minds with more analytical options.
    2. Too many youngsters prefer using their spare time to play video games, instant message, and text message friends than to improve their minds with reading.
    1. The marketing department found that customers prefer the vanilla scent.
    2. Consumer attitude studies conducted by our marketing department seem to indicate that a large majority of our customers had good things to say about the vanilla scent.

Answers

  1. We are pleased to announce the opening of Succasunna's new Municipal Park playground.
  2. Some educators believe that unruly students should be spanked.
  3. Using computers can save time and money.
  4. I let my supervisor beat me at golf so she would promote me.
  5. a.
  6. b.
  7. b.
  8. a.
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