Revising the Big Picture of Your Essay Help (page 2)
Introduction to Revising Your Essay
This lesson deals with the revision process. It shows you how to revise for three important "big picture" issues: fulfilling the assignment, stating a clear thesis, and providing strong support.
From the Latin revisere, meaning to visit or look at again, revision is the most general re-examination of your essay. But it can also seem like the most overwhelming; it's harder to step back and look at your entire essay with fresh eyes and ears than it is to correct spelling and punctuation errors. But this is a critical step in which you make sure you have achieved your goal, and see if any sections of the essay need improving.
Revision takes place on a couple of levels: the "big picture" or essay level, and the paragraph level. It makes sense to look at your writing on these levels first, before jumpig into editing or proofreading. Think of it this way: Why take the time to correct grammatical errors and reword sentences if you might delete those sentences later in the revision process?
You can look at your essay with "fresh eyes" in two ways—literally, by giving your work to a trusted reader for feedback, and figuratively, by examining your own work as if you've never seen it before.
If you think professional writers work alone, think again. They know how important it is to get feedback before they send their work to the publisher—it's not uncommon for them to share their work with a number of trusted readers first. That strategy is important for your essays, too. Readers can help you pinpoint the strengths and weaknesses of your writing. They can tell you what works well, and what doesn't; what comes across clearly to them, and what confuses them.
When you share your writing with people you trust to give you honest feedback, ask them:
- What do you like about my essay?
- Is there anything that seems confusing or unclear?
- What do you think my purpose was in writing this essay?
- Is there anything you need to know more about, or that needs more explanation?
- What do you think I could do to improve this essay?
These questions can also work when you direct them to yourself. But before you reread for revising, take a break. The best revisions take place a day or two after you've completed your draft. That time lets you approach your work with the "fresh eyes"we mentioned earlier in this lesson.
Try reading your essay aloud. Read as if you are presenting it to an audience, and listen to your words. This technique can help you find places where your wording sounds awkward, or where your sentences are confusing or too long. You can also hear where your writing simply doesn't convey what you intended it to. Mark those areas that sound as if they should be revised, making notes of ideas for how to improve them. Remember to keep in mind the following:
- Does my essay fulfill the assignment?
- Is my thesis statement clear? Is it easily identifiable?
- Are my ideas well supported with examples, evidence, and details?
Once you've got feedback and have taken your own notes on what could be improved, it's time to make changes. Those changes could be additions, deletions, or rewordings. The second type of change is probably the hardest. Especially if you don't consider yourself a strong writer, you may feel unwilling to give up a paragraph, or even a sentence. But revising is about keeping what works, and fixing or eliminating what doesn't. If it doesn't work, it detracts from the rest of your essay and needs to go.
Fulfilling the Assignment
On the largest scale, if your draft doesn't fulfill the requirements of the assignment, you need to figure out where you went wrong. You probably don't need to rewrite the whole thing, but rather shift the focus. Try rewriting the assignment in your own words to determine exactly what is expected of you. You may simply need to add a few sentences to your introduction and conclusion, or add a new paragraph that helps clarify your position. Don't stop reworking until your essay clearly and completely responds to the assignment.
Rewording Your Thesis
If your thesis isn't clear, or is not easily identifiable, you probably have one of these common problems:
- No thesis. Your essay may have a lot to say, but its paragraphs are not held together by one controlling idea. This type of essay is often the result of insufficient planning. If you took the time to consider your audience and purpose, brainstorm, and develop a tentative thesis and outline, you should be able to avoid this problem. Go back to your prewriting notes to find the main idea you started with, and begin drafting a thesis from there.
- Your thesis isn't supported by your essay. You do have a thesis, but the body of your essay supports another (perhaps similar) idea. This often happens when writers discover, through the drafting process, that they feel differently about their topic than they originally thought. As a result, they end up building a case for a different thesis. If your essay does indeed support an idea that's different from your thesis (and that idea still addresses the assignment), the easiest way to correct the problem is to rewrite your thesis to fit your essay.
- More than one main idea. If your essay has two, or even three, main ideas, you may not have sufficiently narrowed your thesis during the planning stage. Recall in Lesson 5 the discussion concerning the need to have a thesis that correlates with the space confines of an essay. It must be broad enough to warrant an essay-length discussion, and narrow enough to be able to complete a thorough discussion within those confines. Or, you may have discovered other interesting ideas while drafting and decided to include them. As a result, you have two or three underdeveloped mini essays rather than one fully developed idea. If you have more than one main idea, see if there is a way to tie them together. Otherwise, choose the better of the two and revise your essay to develop that idea alone.
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